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Patty Boss
over 30 days ago to JL Hall

really like your voice / singing - keep it up!



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JL Hall
over 30 days ago to Roy Elkins

what did you think of my jingle, Earth Buddies? Just wondering.

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Roy Elkins
over 30 days ago

Kids will always keep the listener engaged, but there is a fine line between what's effective and what isn't. The kids are genuine in this piece, but the delivery of the voice is garbled. Other than the opening line, it is extremely difficult to understand the lyric. In a jingle, you have to clearly hear the lyric for it to be effective. When the band enters at 17 seconds, the lyric is buried in the mix and hard to decipher. Certainly the right kids were picked as the tone of their voices are high quality and I believe this could be very effective. I would re-cut, give the kids very distinct direction on their vocal and make sure it's up front in the mix. Maybe bring in a fresh set of ears to assist with the production and mix. Hope this helps



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Roy Elkins
over 30 days ago to JL Hall

JL, Pros: Nice voice, nice story. Good vocal phrasing...Cons: The melody of the hook is not strong enough. It's a great lyrical hook, but could use an improved melody to support it.....Also, would like to hear some more dynamic instrumentation to support the vocal......Song has great potential, but needs some production work....Hope this helps...Roy

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JL Hall
over 30 days ago

Thanks Roy, I appreciate the Pros and the Cons that you gave me.



Author
str.productions
over 30 days ago to JL Hall

hi, hope you make me a connection. to celebrate my first year on broadjam and the opening of my new studio(check out the pics) i am offering two songs fully Mastered for FREE if you are interested, just get back to me and I will give you more details
thanks dave



Author
Benjamin Stone
over 30 days ago to JL Hall

Hi JL,

I like your songs a lot. You have a great voice.



Author
Nigel Barrett
over 30 days ago to JL Hall

Hey JL, glad you liked my song you just reviewed - keep up the good work! Every Step has lots of potential!



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JL Hall
over 30 days ago to Penny Towers

Thanks for adding my song to your playlist. I hope you enjoy it.



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JL Hall
over 30 days ago to Ryan Welker

Hi Ryan, I enjoy your music. When you get a chance Id love to get your feedback on my song "Every Step Of The Way". Take Care.

JL



Author
JL Hall
over 30 days ago to Roy Elkins

Hi Roy, Thanks for connecting. If you get a chance please listen to the new song "Every Step of The Way".

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Author
Roy Elkins
over 30 days ago

JL, Please see your page for my comments. Roy



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