My Three Kids Music

First of all the vocal was great...lots of emotion and right on pitch...the lyric used quite a few generic phrases or cliché's...yes we all use them and yes you'll hear songs on the radio that use cliché's but those songs are usually written by the artist...if you are the artist then you can most likely get away with cliché's but if you are pitching this to other artists you might want to come up with fresher more original detailed descriptions and actions...the arrangement is good and the overall length of song is very commercial...the melody started out reminiscent of an early Americana song titled For what it's worth by Buffalo Springfield but that won't hurt your chances with your song...